It was composed by an eleven year old child. What I especially like about it is that there is no digression from the main import (which is usually typical of novice attempts at verse, something I still struggle with), and the poem ends with a clear conclusion that ties up beautifully with everything that precedes it. My recommendation to the young poet is to lend the work some structure - maybe give every verse a meter. Start with (given the opening verse):
[da-dum] [da-dum] [da-dum] [da-dum]
[I-want] [to-be] [the-spi] [der-that]
MashaAllah for the clarity of thought that gave rise to this poem.
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